Different layout and opacity.
I like the idea of the text attacking, but i felt it wasn’t as strong as it reading like a quickly scrawled letter. Conceptually it was stronger but i prefer the later
To give the feel of a real pined over letter i used the ink effect i experimented with earlier to add in tears, this adds to the sadness of the piece.
I also included a texture for a coffe stain to give the feel that the person who recieved the letter had really been hurt by such a simple piece of paper, and really studied it, looking at it all night.
This is quite a powerful feeling to come from a simple piece.